In my opinion your writing is good But I think in sentence "asking my parent" you should use "parents". and In sentence "When I told some of my close friends with this dream" I think be better you say " When I told some of my close friends 'about' this dream&quo...
In my opinion your diary is good but I suggest you if you want to write name of the day you must use capital character " Saturday". after you use "comma" you have to use " space". and I think in sentence " Yeah where I had to keep them growing day by day" y...
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In my opinion the grammar is good but I think you don't have to use "," at the sentence "During the day I picked up my mom from her factory, 'after that' I'm going...blablabla" it's oke and if you want to writing name place you must use capital character "Rancaekek". m
if you want to continue story with "but" word don't use punctuation ",". if the sentence end with period, you must use capital character on the new sentence. in this sentence "Although not all my friends were not present" in my opinion you don't have to use double &quo