(Need Comment, Advice, Critism) IELTS Writing Practice
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(Need Comment, Advice, Critism) IELTS Writing Practice
Hello, this is my first time make thread in here. Recently, I just begin to study and practice english intensively for IELTS because I have a dream to continue my study in Europe. However, last time I take TOEFL ITP and my score was 503. Yeah, it's not enough for me to study in Europe with that score and mostly universities in Europe need IELTS as their requirement to enter. Logically, IELTS is harder than TOEFL (iBT), so as illustration, 503 as my score before represent that my skill in english still in the worst state
So for my first thread, I want to post my english writing practice for IELTS because it's really impossible to practice alone, especially for writing and speaking. If you have much free-time, just look to my posts below and surely these are not my homework, these are purely my own practice. Thank so much
Spoiler for "IELTS Writing Practice Task 1":
The picture shows us the differences of island before and after the facilities was built for tourists.
The condition of island before construction was very empty because no one have ever touched the island. There was no any facilities to be used to stay and eat and so was access as well. Therefore the island with this condition could not be used by tourist and really not interesting as a vacation place even there was a beautiful beach in the west of the island because no one access can be used to go there.
Moving onto the one after construction, now the island is very nice for tourists to spend their holiday there. Some facilities, like accommodation, was built in the west and the other one was in the middle of island. The others, such as restaurant and reception, was built between two accommodation areas and the pier was built in the south of island which two cruise ships are docked there. In addition, the owner of island did not forget to provide access in the island. Footpath was built around accommodation areas and as an access to beach and vehicle track was built as an access from pier to the reception and restaurant. By adding footpath, now tourist can go to the beach in the west of island and they can swim near the beach.
In conclusion, there are many changes and development of facilities in the island. Now, it will be very useful to develop the sector of tourism in that island.
Spoiler for "IELTS Writing Practice Task 2":
Foreign language education is a new problem for students in the school. Some experts give their opinion that foreign language education is better to be taught since the primary school. There are both advantages and disadvantages of teaching foreign language in primary school which I will explain in the following paragraph.
The needed of foreign language is urgent for global era right now and it needs long time to study other language. Some educational experts think the best time of learning foreign language is in primary school rather than secondary school because more young the children is more easy to learn and shape their tongue to speak the other language. In addition, the time in primary school is more flexible and students able to spend more time to learn foreign language.
However, primary school students have high risk in loss their nationality because language is the one of the important part of country identity. With learning other language, it can break their own language because maybe the students is more interested to learn . It can be proved by the National Exam for senior high school students in Indonesia which get more good result in English than in Bahasa. It is the most worried problem for government because many students are more interesting with foreign language than their own country language.
In conclusion, teaching foreign language earlier has more advantages side rather than their disadvantages. Although introducing it earlier have positive side, the teachers must have appropriate teaching methods without losing student learning interest of their own country language.
After you read, if you know where the wrong grammar, vocabulary, or something else, please just comment and criticize my writing. And my another post, you can see in my blog and you can comment as well. Thank you